We all are learning about taking the boring words out and put exiting or action words in are writing here's all the staff that you need in you writing nouns, adjective, adverb, verbs full stops and capital letters.
I found it easy to remember what I done at the wild lab.
I found it challenging to write it in to my google docs.
Next time I will ask somebody for help.
Here's a boring sentence it has no full stops and capital letters. the day is the wild lab
The Wild Lab
We all were by the trees. They were so humongous then Ellen said “we are going to play hide and seek” but Pete said “ we are going to play a new game today”. So we waited because Pete had to put us as a group of five. We were the crayfish! There were crayfish, mayfly’s, rock and this dying one but the rock and the dying one can't be defeated then we had to go behind a tree. But I died in the first match. Then we had to stop playing. because we were going to the mighty hill so some of us grabbed a stick so I did too. My stick was the biggest one there.
It was time to go up the mighty hill. It was very very big. but when we gone up the mighty hill I ensterly got tired then I started running up the hill but there was heaps of sheep poop there was this flower they called it bunny ears we got up the hill it took hours in my mind then we gone down .the SUPER MIGHTY HILL.
We were all yealing yay yay then we slowed down. Then Tiana B slipped on sheep poo then some of the other kids started laughing at her. But I used my stick to make me stop when I went too fast. Some of us setted our own paste when we went down.
Then we went to the river to catch mayflies. Calais got water in her boots when she slipped over because there was this slippery rock then we went to the bridge. After we catched the mayflies we had lunch. But it was the funnest school trip of my life. Then we all said bye to Pete and Alin. But when we were at the river we had maglerflying glasses to look at how many mayflies we catched. But the group that I was in catched 7 mayflies but there's heaps like heaps of dirt and leaves.
Kia ora ko denim toku ingoa i like how you writing is so big it is great to see that you loved the wild lab trap.
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